Ok, I'm not going to be nice... that really sucked
Reasons why:
1a.) It wasn't funny.
1b.) You were trying to be funny.
2.) The art wasn't good, and almost everything looked like crap...
3.) The whole thing in particular was bad. Ooh, look, she found the key. Let's switch back and forth for no reason whatsoeve-JUST PICKUP THE GODDAMN KEY! (well, you get my point with that).
4.) The voice acting was horrible.
5.) The animation was just terrible, and how you switched drawing styles helped in negative amounts.
I've never been a fan of the series (to tell you the truth, I think they all sucked), but I always give them a chance. So far, you haven't redeemed youself (not even in the first place). This seemed more like a rush-job to get your spot in the top 50 (which it no doubt will get) rather than an actual cartoon. I'm pretty sure most people would have rather waited more for the cartoon to get polished up than a half-assed job.
Oh, and I read the author's comments. I read how this was deleted and all, but still, if you had all that time to work on this, you could've improved it much, much more than you really did.